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He looks out to the stars
And he thinks of your eyes
How, even in the darkest nights
They glisten so brightly and beautifully

He stands at the edge of the tide
And he misses the passion
That he can only know
Just by being near you

He does not ride a steed of snow white
And he will not compose a sonnet
Never will he stand at your door
Carrying a box of chocolates and roses

Your love is like the blood in his veins
The only thing keeping him alive
And every night you sleep alone
He dies a painful death

He will tear down the gates of hell
And rip the devil apart
Face the wrath of all Gods and deities
Just to wipe away your tears

And if your heart was broken
He would pull out his own
And offer it to you freely
So you may live on

His words are of macabre
But his soul is only of love for you
He is your strong-in-heart poet
Your loving dark romantic
Edit:: April 11th 2010
Changed to "Poetry, Romantic, Post-Teen (Mature), Free & Blank Verse"
Moved to 'Poetry' Category
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The inspiration was given to me after talking to a friend about a conversation they had had with their partner. This immediately leaped into my mind. It's quite different to my other works, but I rather like this one.

You can find this poem in my book 'Permit Me To Dream' which you can buy on amazon.com, amazon.co.uk, amazon.ca and other online book stores.

Word Count: 176
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:iconwildphoenix22:
Wildphoenix22 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great poem! Once again very well written. I really like the "dark" tone of this one. It adds a little edge and mystery! ;)
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Professional Writer
I'm glad you like it.
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Dororox Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Professional Writer
What the hell? Are you seriously posting a chain-mail as a comment on my deviations?
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Dororox Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
sorry cmon didn't know it would bother you.
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:iconstevejones313:
SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Professional Writer
#1 - It's spam. No one likes spam.
#2 - I work hard on my works and you use them as a forum for ridiculous posts.
#3 - You posted in on SEVERAL deviations.

And you thought it wouldn't bother me? Try to show some respect to your fellow deviants please.
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Dororox Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
I will for now on again I apologies I feel really bad
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oneofakindwriter Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this poem i had to read 3 times straight. it was amazing the only thing i dont like is that, as with all writings, it eventually had to end. :) <3
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Professional Writer
That is incredibly kind of you to say.
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Aurora8911 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
D> seriously these words touched my heart...wonderfull job bro
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks for the kind words ^_^
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Aurora8911 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
no problem ^^
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CrystalTearz55 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
beyond speechless
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Professional Writer
Hopefully in a good way ^^
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dAb-blingin-art Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
I am honored to have featured this wonderful piece in my journal [link]
:heart:
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Professional Writer
And I am honoured to have my work featured by anyone.

Thank you very much ^^
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dAb-blingin-art Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
Pleasure is mine!
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amylee103008 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I want a dark romantic love!
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Professional Writer
^^
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BreathingAnagram Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010  Student Writer
Hahah first word that comes to mind when reading this is....
Sexy!
You have some skills there, man, keep writing!
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010  Professional Writer
Thanks a lot, mate. Always a pleasure to receive a warm response to my work ^^
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Spode999 Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Wow. That's amazing.
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:iconstevejones313:
SteveJones313 Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Professional Writer
That is very kind of you to say. Thank you ^^
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Spode999 Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Student Digital Artist
No problem!
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DEZERTER579z Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
wow, and i thought my poems were good.. :D
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:iconstevejones313:
SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank you for the compliment.

I've had a quick look at your work and it's not bad at all. The only thing I would suggest is perhaps using stanzas within your poetry.

You've written some good stuff, amigo.
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DEZERTER579z Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009
your welcome.

okay, thank you, i could always use help.
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009  Professional Writer
^_^
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DEZERTER579z Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009
:D
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psychoren Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009  Student General Artist
wow. this gave me the ultimate goosebumps when i finished reading it.. i love this !!! great work. <3
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2009  Professional Writer
Thank you very much - ^_^
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soslovinsungirl Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2008
alas, how love should be
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2008  Professional Writer
It's the true Messiah
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CaBu12 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The second to last paragraph HAS to be my favorite part of this piece, it gave me total goosebumps! You rock! XD I could read your work over and over everyday! Hurry up and get published already! *whip* You're so awesome!
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2008  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! It means a lot to me! :hug:
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XxxLonely-WolfxxX Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2008
Oh bloody hell.
This is smiply, amazing, Steve.
I love it so much :heart:
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2008  Professional Writer
Awwww thank you!
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XxxLonely-WolfxxX Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2008
No problem! >3<
Ily.
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Professional Writer
Kind of you to say.
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XxxLonely-WolfxxX Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008

I don't get a I love you back D:
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Professional Writer
I have to be careful who I say that too - you'd be surprised how many problems I've had after saying that
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XxxLonely-WolfxxX Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008

Ohnoes! Girlies nowadays!
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Professional Writer
Yeah - without sounding arrogant, I've had to break a few hearts.
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hopelessheart330 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Simply beautiful.


One of my favorites of all you have written.
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2008  Professional Writer
Thank you! I think it's definately in my top ten ^^;
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hopelessheart330 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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dark-star Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2008
I'm not really one for poetry but I like this. A good contrast between the joys and quiet desperation of love.

(Not to be petty though hun, but you mean "Your" in that fourth stanza not "You're")
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2008  Professional Writer
Thanks for commenting; I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Also, I've made the correction. Thank you for pointing that out.
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dark-star Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2008
No problem. I don't know why I even notice things like that though, I think it's because just since I have to write essays for school and you can't use conjunctions I always just read it as "you are" and I was reading your poem and I was like "you are.." then I was all confused and weirded out until I realized that... I didn't want to offend you by correcting your grammar though it seems like such a snotty thing to do.
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SteveJones313 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008  Professional Writer
It's annoying, but much required. Policy is not to shoot the messenger :p
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