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When The Last Tear Falls by =SteveJones313:iconSteveJones313:



And when the last tear falls, the darkness calls
It drags me to a time when you loved me so long ago
And when the last shining star in the sky burns out and dies
My hope fades as I remember your last goodbye...


When I first saw you, I swore angels sang high above
And it was a harmony of fate with a melody of love
And though you tried to pretend that the passion was never there
You longed for me, I longed for you, there was love in the air

But you gave in to your heart's desire
And our love burned and grew like wildfire
We held each other everynight
Maybe it was wrong, but it felt so right!

But when the last tear falls, the darkness calls
It drags me to a time when you loved me so long ago
And when the last shining star in the sky burns out and dies
My hope fades as I remember your last goodbye...


We swore on the alter that we'd never part
Everytime we kissed, it warmed my heart
I swore I would stand by you until the end of time
You swore to me you loved me, it was beautiful as rhyme

But when the last tear falls, the darkness calls
It drags me to a time when you loved me so long ago
And when the last shining star in the sky burns out and dies
My hope fades as I remember your last goodbye...


It was a hot summer night when I walked through the door
And there you were with my best friend rolling around on the floor
My heart broke, my anger raged, you drove me insane
And as you both left for good, I knew I'd never smile again...

And when the last tear falls, the darkness calls
And I watch so helplessly as I did once before
And when the last shining star in the sky burns out and dies
I curse myself for falling for your trick and all your lies

So let the darkness call, I won't care at all
I'm done with all the pain, the final tear as fall'n
And as that shining star dies, it lights up the sky
And as the fires burn I know that hope is still alive...


...

And now the last tear has come, the crying is done
I've fought for years with the memory, and finally I've won
I'm walking tall, I'm done with the pain
And as the star is reborn and finally smile again...
©2007-2010 =SteveJones313
:iconstevejones313:

Author's Comments

Very Meatloaf-esq. Yes I have a tune for it - wish I could play instruments...bugger.

Anyway, the plot is rather simple to see - a man is living a life of regret and bitterness, constantly looking back at his lost love.

This is not based on a true story, but there are hidden references to some past experiences I've had in this song.

Enjoy my friends. I love the title!

Word Count: 428

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:icontaliionis:
As I said when I read it on MSN,
Excellent, brilliant writing my friend.

Mitch
:iconstevejones313:
Your name is Mitch? I never knew that.

Thanks again!

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"What is it now Eike? The Good Samaritan?" - Homunculus (Shadow of Memories)
:icondoorfromheaven:
Wow...that actually brought tears to my eyes...o.O Very well done!! I would love to hear it...
It's amazing...
and powerful...
Great job!

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| falling in love is like getting a preview of heaven |

i know how it feels
when love goes away.
:heart:
tread softly.
:iconmokubalover:
Very nice! :+fav:
Will we ever get to hear the tune?

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Hey Marcus! How was your weekend? Wha'dya do? Here, I bought you some pens for your crazy pocket. I know you love pens, and I happen to love pens too. We should talk about pens someday. Just sit around and talk about pens. Inks, pens, caps, I love 'em.
:iconstevejones313:
I'm in talks...

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"What is it now Eike? The Good Samaritan?" - Homunculus (Shadow of Memories)
:iconstevejones313:
Wow! Thanks!

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"What is it now Eike? The Good Samaritan?" - Homunculus (Shadow of Memories)
:iconmangachibi:
You're right, the title (and the piece itself) is very awesome :D ;p

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:iconsoslovinsungirl:
this is truly amazing and beautiful, i can't tell you how much i loved reading it, you've really outdone yourself, this is one of your best pieces :heart:

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we can only see as far as the light shows, we never know what the end of the path holds, nor the twists and turns the path takes until we are upon them
:icondoorfromheaven:
You're welcome!! ^^

--
| falling in love is like getting a preview of heaven |

i know how it feels
when love goes away.
:heart:
tread softly.
:iconmokubalover:
...Hmm? ^^;

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Hey Marcus! How was your weekend? Wha'dya do? Here, I bought you some pens for your crazy pocket. I know you love pens, and I happen to love pens too. We should talk about pens someday. Just sit around and talk about pens. Inks, pens, caps, I love 'em.

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